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Originally Posted by staticsindy short stories? poems? prose? whatever? |
all of the above, although i'm not sure which i'm stronger in. i get compliments all the time but i think i'm too self-conscious. basically i feel that everything i write is weak.
i'm thinking of going to grad school for writing, but i don't know yet.
i only have one small thing i want to pick at in that passage:
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Originally Posted by staticsindy Maybe he should tell her about all the cruelty in the world and that she should never ever let that cruelty turn her into someone that lacked all the innocence and virtue she now possessed. |
the second 'that' needs to be a 'who'. people are 'who', i.e. 'the person who', 'the girl who', etc. other than that i would like to see more of it, if you're willing to share.