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Old 09-15-2008, 08:06 PM
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Old 09-15-2008, 08:10 PM
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They look cool but I suggest you check the grammar as there are several really bad errors in there that detract from your marketing. Capitals at the start of a sentence would be good and there's a few comma's missing. Plus I can see a couple of typo/spelling errors too at a glance.

That said I didn't actually read it verbatim.
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They look cool but I suggest you check the grammar as there are several really bad errors in there that detract from your marketing. Capitals at the start of a sentence would be good and there's a few comma's missing. Plus I can see a couple of typo/spelling errors too at a glance.

That said I didn't actually read it verbatim.
BTW I just read this one: Our aloe is hear to sooth your skin, when your burnt like toast.

Should be: Our Aloe is here to soothe your skin, when you're burnt like toast.
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that was the one that got me too

you also have some extra apostrophes
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